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Post by japaneseteeth on Dec 7, 2014 3:58:15 GMT
Cool. I think it still needs some polish. I really want to have a strong start, especially since it doesn't have a built-in audience like shipping stories do.
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Post by japaneseteeth on Dec 13, 2014 5:17:50 GMT
Okay, I have a decent amount of the first chapter of that Spike story done. Mainly I want to make sure that it's interest-catching enough, because Luna does a lot of info-dumping about how the spell works.
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Post by Mezzaphor on Dec 16, 2014 18:42:37 GMT
Anyone else find that the act of writing a character makes you like them more? It happened to me once with Derpy, and now it's happening again with Trixie.
Didn't happen with Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon, though.
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Post by japaneseteeth on Dec 16, 2014 18:59:54 GMT
Yeah, I've definitely noticed that as well. I think part of it is that writing them forces you to dig into their motivations and get to know them better. While I'm here, I hit a bit of a snag with the first chapter of my current story. In short, I wanted to cut away from Spike and Luna talking because otherwise there's just too much exposition all at the start. So I jumped forward to where Spike is putting the plan into action, with occasional flashbacks to the relevant bits of their conversation. I'm not quite sure it's working though, so I may go back and just extend the conversation a little. Thoughts?
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Post by Mezzaphor on Dec 23, 2014 0:31:49 GMT
Finally nearing the end of "Black Magic Mare". It's odd how the act of telling a story causes it to change. I started this expecting it to be an amusing bit of fluff, but now that it's ending... it could be rather poignant, if I can pull this off right.
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Post by japaneseteeth on Dec 23, 2014 0:53:58 GMT
That happens to me all the time.
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Post by Mezzaphor on Jan 15, 2015 19:36:40 GMT
Nearing the end of "Split Eyes", the companion piece to "Black Magic Mare". Oddly, it’s much shorter.
I think I need to go back and punch it up a bit more. Take my own advice to Applelight: have Ditzy imply events rather than say outright what happened.
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Post by japaneseteeth on Feb 8, 2015 4:28:46 GMT
Okay, I finally finished chapter 2 of my latest fic. If anybody wants to look over it, that would be great. It's literally been years since I wrote an action scene, and it shows.
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Post by Applelight Limited on Feb 8, 2015 9:22:10 GMT
I'll take a look. Google docs?
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Post by japaneseteeth on Feb 8, 2015 18:09:08 GMT
Here you go.Spike pops into the Cake Twins' dreams. I think the first part is okay, but everything after Spike jumps off the table is a bit iffy, imo.
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Post by Applelight Limited on Feb 9, 2015 21:21:20 GMT
So I read your chapter JT, and it's looking pretty good. I'll try to get back to you with some more suggestions.
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Post by japaneseteeth on Feb 9, 2015 22:21:08 GMT
Thanks for looking at it.
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Post by Applelight Limited on Feb 9, 2015 22:27:29 GMT
No problem. I've been meaning to read more of your stuff for ages. I'm just sorry it's taken so long.
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Post by japaneseteeth on Feb 10, 2015 2:15:25 GMT
Too busy with Warhammer models?
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Post by Applelight Limited on Feb 10, 2015 2:16:59 GMT
Eeeyep. Oh, and trying to draw, with not much success. There's just not enough hours in the day.
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